Stansbury Found The Right Mix

[JeremiahShort26]

This is my column on how Stansbury has finally found the right mix for success.<div>
</div><div>https://rspublishing.wordpress.com/2011/11/24/stansbury-has-finally-found-the-right-mix/</div><div>
</div><div>Happy Thanksgiving</div>

 

[mcdawg22]

If I may make a suggestion, take yourself out of the story. It comes across as a little Rick Clevelandish.

 

[JeremiahShort26]

If I may make a suggestion, take yourself out of the story. It comes across as a little Rick Clevelandish.

Thanks and yea I'm trying to scale and take myself out of stories. A friend of mine pointed out some areas where I've been doing it.

 

[Bobby Ricigliano]

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[aTotal360]

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[drunkernhelldawg]

Good job. Could use a sentence explaining the D.J. Gardner Twitter Fiasco. Wouldn't mind reading shorter paragraphs.

 

[formerpolkie]

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[JeremiahShort26]

Good job. Could use a sentence explaining the D.J. Gardner Twitter Fiasco. Wouldn't mind reading shorter paragraphs.

I'll take the paragraph thing into consideration. I try not to discuss D.J. Gardner situation. I might start ranting for three pages.

 

[She Mate Me]

I would reiterate the point about shorter paragraphs and add that a 50 word first sentence lost me immediately. You are writing about sports, not attempting the great American novel.